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One day last fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I enter the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was surprising silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he learned that I hadn't played chess before he asked one of the club members, Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over. Because Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be to easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing feat I challenged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!" As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting.
The last day of fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I enter the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was surprising silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he learned that I hadn't played chess before he asked one of the club members, Amanda, to explain the rules of the gameto me. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over. Because Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be to easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing defeat I challenged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!" As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting
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One day last fall,I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I enter the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was surprising silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he learned that I hadn't played chess before he asked one of the club members, Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over. Because Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be too easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing feat I challenged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!" As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting.
ReplyDeleteOne day last fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I entered the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was surprisingly silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he learned that I hadn't played chess before, he asked one of the club members, Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over. Because Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills, so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be too easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing feat. I challenged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!" As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting.
ReplyDeleteOne day last fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I entered the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was surprisingly silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he learned that I had not played chess before he asked one of the club members, Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over." Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be to easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing defeat. I challenged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!" As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting.
ReplyDeleteOne day last fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I enter the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was a surprising silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he noticed that I hadn't played chess before, he asked one of the club members, Amanda to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces, then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over". Since Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills, so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be to easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing defeat. I challenged her to another game, this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate"! As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try out at the next week's meeting.
ReplyDeleteOne day last fall I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I entered the classroom where the club met I was amazed that the place was packed with players, and boards. However, it was surprising silent at the club. The club advisor greeted me as I entered. When he learned that I never played chess before he asked one of the club members, Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. Then she explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over." Amanda was such a good teacher that she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills. Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she accomplished this amazing feat. I challenged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!" As I left the chess club that day my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting.
ReplyDeleteOne day last fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I entered the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was suprisingly silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he learned that I hadn't played chess before he asked one of the club members, Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me that the board and the pieces, she then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, " Remember, when the peice called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over." Because Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills, so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be too easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing feat. I challanged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, " Checkedmate!" As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting.
ReplyDeleteOne day last fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I enter the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was surprising silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he learned that I hadn't played chess before he asked one of the club members, Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over. Because Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be to easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing feat I challenged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!" As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting.
ReplyDeleteOne day last fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I enter the classroom where the club met I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was surprising silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he learned that I hadn't played chess before, he asked one of the club members Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over”, Because Amanda was such a good teacher; she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be too easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing feat I challenged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!" as I left the chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting.
One day last fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I enter the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was surprising silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he learned that I hadn't played chess before he asked one of the club members, Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over,” because Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be too easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing defeat. I challenged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!" As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting.
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One day last fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I enter the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards yet it was surprising silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he learned that I hadn't played chess before he asked one of the club members, Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over.”. Because Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be to easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing feat. I challenged her to another game and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!". As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting.
ReplyDeleteThe last day of fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at school, as I enter the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was surprising silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he learned that I hadn't played chess before he asked one of the club members Amanda to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over.” Because Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be too easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing feat, I challenged her to another game and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!" As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting.
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One day last fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I enter the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was surprising silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he learned that I hadn't played chess before he asked one of the club members, Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over. Because Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be to easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing feat I challenged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!" As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting.
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One day last fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I entered the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was surprisingly silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he learned that I hadn't played chess before he asked one of the club members, Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over. Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be to easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished the amazing feat. I challenged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!" As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting.
One day last fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I entered the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was surprising silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he learned that I hadn't played chess before, he asked one of the club members, Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over. Because Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be to easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing defeat. I challenged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!" As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next weeks meeting.
ReplyDeleteOne day last fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I enter the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was surprisingly silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he learned that I hadn't played chess before he asked one of the club members, Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over. Because Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be to easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing feat I challenged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!" As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting.
ReplyDeleteOne day last fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I entered the classroom where the club met. I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was surprisingly silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he learned that I hadn't played chess before he asked one of the club members, Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over." Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her "not to be to easy on me." She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing feat I challenged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!" As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting.
Kayla Ormandy
One day last fall, I decided to investigate the Chess Club at school. As I entered the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was surprisingly silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he learned that I hadn't played chess before he asked one of the club members, Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over. Because Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be to easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing feat, I challenged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!" As I left the Chess Club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting.
ReplyDeleteOne day,last fall, I decided to Observe the chess club at school. As I entered the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was filled with ches players and chess boards, yet it was surprisingly silent. The club advisor greeted me when i entered the room. When he realized that i hadn't played chess before, he asked one of the club members, Amanda< to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each other players took turnss on the game and on moving the pieces.Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no mores it can make, it's called checkmate and then the game ends. Amanda was such a good teacher that she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out myself what Amanda has taught me, Amanda suggested to play a game. I agreed and told her not to be easy on me. Amanda obeyed my command and beat me in only four moves! Amanda then showed me the victory of her game and how she accomplished it, I then challenged her to another game, and this time i lasted fourteen moves untill sheyelled "checkmate!" As i left the chess club that day last fall, my mind was on fire with the new moves and strategias Amanda taught me in chess, I will be attending next weeks meeting using the moves i learned.
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ReplyDeleteOne day last fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I entered the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was surprisingly silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he learned that I hadn't played chess before, he asked one of the club members Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over". Because Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be to easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing feat. I challenged her to another game and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!" As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting.
One day last fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I enter the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was surprisingly silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he heard that I hadn't played chess before he asked one of the club members, Amanda to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over”. Since Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be to easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing defeat I challenged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!" As I left chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting.
ReplyDeleteOne day last fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I entered the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was surprisingly silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he learned that I hadn't played chess before he asked one of the club members, Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over. Because Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be too easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing feat. I challenged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!" As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting. Nicholas Mikelinich
ReplyDeleteOne day last fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I entered the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was surprisingly silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he learned that I hadn't played chess before, he asked one of the club members, Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over.” Because Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be to easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing feat. I challenged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!" As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting.
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ReplyDeleteOne day last fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I entered the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was surprisingly silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he learned that I hadn't played chess before, he asked one of the club members, Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over." Because Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills, so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be too easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing feat. I challenged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!" As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting.
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One day last fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at school. As I entered the classroom where the club met, I was amazed that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was surprisingly silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When he learned that I hadn't played chess before, he asked one of the club members, Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, "Remember, when the piece called the king has no moves left, it's called checkmate and the game is then over." Because Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills, so Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be too easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then showed me how she had accomplished this amazing feat. I challenged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she yelled, "Checkmate!" As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on fire with moves and strategies to try at next week's meeting.
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