Following is a paragraph with approximately 5-7 errors. Please copy and paste the paragraph into the comment box and make all necessary corrections. By the time you post your response, all corrections should have been made.
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Early mornings on her father's Montana ranch are the time that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise, she walks eagerly, down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. after she feeds them, she saddles up her most favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse raced across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha that was a wonderful ride. Let's head back, she whispers." Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
Early mornings on her father's Montana ranch are the time that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise, she walks eagerly, down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. after she feeds them, she saddles up her most favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse raced across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha that was a wonderful ride. Let's head back, she whispers." Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
ReplyDeleteEarly mornings on her father's Montana ranch are the time's that Ellen enjoy the most. Just after sunrise, she walks eagerly, down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. after she feeds them, she saddles up her most favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse raced across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha that was a wonderful ride, Let's head back, she whispers." Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
Early mornings on her father's Montana ranch there are times that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise, she walks eagerly down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. After she feeds them, she saddles up her most favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse raced across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha that was a wonderful ride. Let's head back," she whispers. Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
ReplyDeleteEarly morning on her father's Montana ranch is the time that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise she walks eagerly down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. After she feeds them, she saddles up her most favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse raced across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha that was a wonderful ride. Let's head back, she whispers." Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them beginning a gentle stroll back to the barn.
ReplyDeleteEarly morning on her father's Montana ranch is the time that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise she walks eagerly down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. After she feeds them, she saddles up her most favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse raced across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha that was a wonderful ride. Let's head back, she whispers." Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them beginning a gentle stroll back to the barn.
ReplyDeleteEarly mornings on her father's Montana ranch are the time that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise, she walks eagerly, down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. after she feeds them, she saddles up her most favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse raced across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha that was a wonderful ride. Let's head back, she whispers." Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn
ReplyDeleteEarly mornings on her father's Montana ranch are the times that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise, she walks eagerly down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. After she feeds them, she saddles up her most favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse raced across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha that was a wonderful ride. Let's head back, she whispers." Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
ReplyDeleteEarly mornings on her father's Montana ranch are the time that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise she walks eagerly down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses, after she feeds them, she saddles up her most favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse raced across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha that was a wonderful ride”. “Let's head back” she whispers. Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
ReplyDeleteEarly mornings on her father's Montana ranch are the time that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise, she walks eagerly down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. After she feeds them, she saddles up her favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse race across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha, that was a wonderful ride. Let's head back," she whispers. Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
ReplyDeleteEarly mornings on her fathers Montana ranch is the time that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise, she walks eagerly down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. After she feeds them she saddles up her favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse race across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. " Sasha that was a wonderful ride. Let's head back.” She whispers. Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
ReplyDeleteEarly mornings on her father's Montana ranch are the time that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise, she walks eagerly down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. After she feeds them, she saddles up her most favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive, as she and the horse raced across the green fields. The sound of singing birds was music to her ears. Ellen leans down, and gently pats her horse on the neck. " Sasha, that was a wonderful ride. Let's head back, she whispers." Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
ReplyDeleteEarly mornings on her father's Montana ranch are the time that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise, she walks eagerly down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. After she feeds them, she saddles up her favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels so alive. The horse races across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha that was a wonderful ride. Let's head back, she whispers". Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
ReplyDeleteEarly mornings on her fathers' Montana ranch is the time that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise, she walks eagerly, down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. After she feeds them, she saddles up her most favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse race across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha that was a wonderful ride. Let's head back, she whispers." Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
ReplyDeleteEarly mornings on her father's Montana ranch are the times' that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise she walks eagerly down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. after she feeds them, she saddles up her most favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse race across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha that was a wonderful ride."
ReplyDelete"Lets' head back." She whispers." Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
Early mornings on her father's Montana ranch are the times that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise, she walks eagerly down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. After she feeds them, she saddles up her most favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse raced across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha that was a wonderful ride, let's head back, she whispers." Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
ReplyDelete-SAMANTHA CARTER-
Early mornings on her father’s Montana ranch are the times that Ellen enjoy the most. Just after sunrise, she walks eagerly down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. After she feeds them, she saddles up her most favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse race across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha that was a wonderful ride, let's head back, she whispers." Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
ReplyDelete-Michael McKay
Early mornings on her father's Montana ranch are the time that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise, she walks eagerly, down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. after she feeds them, she saddles up her most favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse raced across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha that was a wonderful ride. Let's head back, she whispers." Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
ReplyDeleteEarly mornings on her father's Montana ranch is the time that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise she walks eagerly down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. After she feeds them she saddles up her most favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse race across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha that was a wonderful ride let's head back, she whispered." Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
Kayla Ormandy
Early mornings on her father's Montana ranch are the time that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise, she walks eagerly, down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. after she feeds them, she saddles up her most favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse raced across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha that was a wonderful ride. Let's head back, she whispers." Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
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Early mornings on her father's Montana ranch,are the times that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise, she walks eagerly down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. After she feeds them, she saddles up her most favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse race across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha that was a wonderful ride. Let's head back" she whispers. Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
-Nicole Pieta
Early mornings on her father's Montana ranch are the time that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise, she walks eagerly down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. After she feeds them, she saddles up her most favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse raced across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha that was a wonderful ride. Let's head back.¨ she whispers. Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
ReplyDelete(NOT FIXED)Early mornings on her father's Montana ranch are the time that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise, she walks eagerly, down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. after she feeds them, she saddles up her most favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse raced across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha that was a wonderful ride. Let's head back, she whispers." Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
ReplyDelete(FIXED)Early mornings on her father's Montana ranch are the time that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise, she walks eagerly down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. After she feeds them, she saddles up her most favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse raced across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha that was a wonderful ride, let’s head back" she whispers. Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
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ReplyDeleteEarly mornings on her father's Montana Ranch are the times that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise, she walks eagerly down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. After she feeds them, she saddles up her most favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse race across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha, that was a wonderful ride. Let's head back, she whispers." Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
ReplyDeleteNicholas Mikelinich
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ReplyDeleteEarly mornings on her father's Montana ranch are the times that Ellen enjoys the most. Just after sunrise, she walks eagerly down the dirt road behind her house to feed the horses. After she feeds them, she saddles up her favorite mare for a brisk ride. She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horse race across the green fields. The sound of singing birds is music to her ears. Ellen leans down and gently pats her horse on the neck. "Sasha, that was a wonderful ride. Let's head back," she whispers. Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement, and the two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn.
Early morning , on her father’s Montana Ranch , are the time’s that Ellen enjoys the most .Just after sunrise ,she walks eagerly down the dirt road behind her house to feed the hores.After she feeds them , she saddles up her favorite mare for a brisk ride .She feels wonderfully alive as she and the horses raced across the green fields . The sound of singing birds is music to my ears . Ellen leans down and gentley pats on her horses neck . “Sasha that was a wonderful ride . lets head back “ she wispers . Sasha tosses her head as if in agreement and two of them begin a gentle stroll back to the barn .--- CLAUDIA RUPP /LUNA MIRABELLA x Byee
ReplyDeleteHi Claudia,
ReplyDeleteThis won't count as a grade for you because you posted it after I posted the key. Please make sure to do Sunday's assignment so that you get credit!
Ms. Sills