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All of us have a special skill or talent. That skill or talent may be drawing, playing a musical instrument, or excelling in a sport. For Mia Hamm it is playing soccer. Both Mia's athletic ability and her interest in the game was evident at a very early age she joined her first soccer team at the age of five and has focused on the sport ever since. At the age of fifteen, Mia became the most youngest player ever to join the U.S. Women's National Team. As the years passed, Mia's dedication to her sport continued to pay off. She won several awards, including three olympic medals, and was recognized as the U.S. Soccer Female Athlete of the Year for five years in a row. It is hard to believe that when Mia was a baby, she has had to spend several months with her feet in casts to correct a structural foot problem. Could you be the next Mia Hamm of art, music, or sports? Anything is possible if you work hard enough.
All of us have a special skill or talent. That skill or talent may be drawing, playing a musical instrument, or excelling in a sport. For Mia Hamm it is playing soccer. Both Mia's athletic ability and her interest in the game was evident at a very early age. She joined her first soccer team at the age of five and has focused on the sport ever since. At the age of fifteen, Mia became the youngest player ever to join the U.S. Women's National team. As the years passed, Mia's dedication to her sport continued to pay off. She won several awards, including three Olympic medals, and was recognized as the U.S. Soccer Female Athlete of the Year for five years in a row. It is hard to believe that when Mia was a baby, she has had to spend several months with her feet in casts to correct a structural foot problem. Could you be the next Mia Hamm of art, music, or sports? Anything is possible if you work hard enough.
ReplyDelete(NOT FIXED)All of us have a special skill or talent. That skill or talent may be drawing, playing a musical instrument, or excelling in a sport. For Mia Hamm it is playing soccer. Both Mia's athletic ability and her interest in the game was evident at a very early age she joined her first soccer team at the age of five and has focused on the sport ever since. At the age of fifteen, Mia became the most youngest player ever to join the U.S. Women's National Team. As the years passed, Mia's dedication to her sport continued to pay off. She won several awards, including three olympic medals, and was recognized as the U.S. Soccer Female Athlete of the Year for five years in a row. It is hard to believe that when Mia was a baby, she has had to spend several months with her feet in casts to correct a structural foot problem. Could you be the next Mia Hamm of art, music, or sports? Anything is possible if you work hard enough.(FIXED)All of us have a special skill or talent. That skill or talent may be drawing, playing a musical instrument, or excelling in a sport. For Mia Hamm it is playing soccer. Both Mia's athletic ability and her interest in the game was evident at a very early age she joined her first soccer team at the age of five and has focused on the sport ever since. At the age of fifteen, Mia became the most youngest player ever to join the U.S. Women's National Team. As the years passed, Mia's dedication to her sport continued to pay off. She won several awards, including three olympic medals, and was recognized as the U.S. Soccer Female Athlete of the Year for five years in a row. It is hard to believe that when Mia was a baby, she has had to spend several months with her feet in casts to correct a structural foot problem. Could you be the next Mia Hamm of art, music, or sports? Anything is possible if you work hard enough.
ReplyDeleteAll of us have a special skill or talent and that skill or talent may be drawing, playing a musical instrument, or excelling in a sport. For Mia Hamm it is playing soccer. Both Mia's athletic ability and her interest in the game were evident at a very early age. She joined her first soccer team at the age of five and has focused on the sport ever since. At the age of fifteen, Mia became the youngest player ever to join the U.S. Women's National Team. As the years passed, Mia's dedication to her sport continued to pay off. She won several awards including three Olympic medals. She was also recognized as the U.S. Soccer Female Athlete of the Year for five years in a row. It is hard to believe that when Mia was a baby, she has had to spend several months with her feet in casts to correct a structural foot problem. Could you be the next Mia Hamm of art, music, or sports? Anything is possible if you work hard enough.
ReplyDeleteAll of us have a special skill or talent. That skill or talent may be drawing, playing a musical instrument, or excelling in a sport. For Mia Hamm it is playing soccer. Both Mia's athletic ability and her interest in the game were evident at a very early age. She joined her first soccer team at the age of five and has focused on the sport ever since. At the age of fifteen, Mia became the youngest player ever to join the U.S. Womens' National Team. As the years passed, Mia's dedication to her sport continued to pay off. She won several awards, including three olympic medals, and was recognized as the U.S. Soccer Female Athlete of the Year for five years in a row. It is hard to believe that when Mia was a baby, shev bmik,l had to spend several months with her feet in casts to correct a structural foot problem. Could you be the next Mia Hamm of art, music, or sports? Anything is possible if you work hard enough.
ReplyDeleteAll of us have a special skill or talent. That skill or talent may be drawing, playing a musical instrument, or excelling in a sport. For Mia Hamm, it is playing soccer. Both Mia's athletic ability and her interest in the game were evident at a very early age. She joined her first soccer team at the age of five, and has focused on the sport ever since. At the age of fifteen, Mia became the youngest player ever to join the U.S. Women's National Team. As the years passed, Mia's dedication to her sport continued to pay off. She won several awards, including three Olympic medals, and was recognized as the U.S. Soccer Female Athlete of the Year for five years in a row. It is hard to believe that when Mia was a baby, she has had to spend several months with her feet in casts to correct a structural foot problem. Could you be the next Mia Hamm of art, music, or sports? Anything is possible if you work hard enough.
ReplyDeleteAll of us have a special skill or talent. That skill or talent may be drawing, playing a musical instrument, or excelling in a sport. For Mia Hamm it is playing soccer. Both Mia's athletic ability and her interest in the game were evident at a very early age. She joined her first soccer team at the age of five and has focused on the sport ever since. At the age of fifteen, Mia became the youngest player ever to join the U.S Women's National Team. As the years passed, Mia's dedication to her sport continued to pay off. She won several awards, including three olympic medals, and was recognized as the U.S. Soccer Female Athlete of the Year for five years in a row. It is hard to believe that when Mia was a baby, she has had to spend several months with her feet in casts to correct a strutural foot problem. Could you be the next Mia Hamm of art, music, or sports? Anything is possible if you work hard enough.
ReplyDeleteAll of us have a special skill or talent. That skill or talent may be drawing, playing a musical instrument, or excelling in a sport. For Mia Hamm it is playing soccer. Both Mia's athletic ability and her interest for the game were evident at a very early age. She joined her first soccer team at the age of five and has focused on the sport ever since. At the age of fifteen, Mia became the youngest player ever to join the U.S. Women's National Team. As the years passed, Mia's dedication to her sport continued to pay off. She won several awards, including three olympic medals and was recognized as the U.S. Soccer Female Athlete of the Year for five years in a row. It is hard to believe that when Mia was a baby, she had to spend several months with her feet in casts to correct a structural foot problem. Could you be the next Mia Hamm of art, music, or sports? Anything is possible if you work hard enough.
ReplyDeleteAll of us have a special skill or talent. That skill or talent may be drawing, playing a musical instrument, or excelling in a sport. For Mia Hamm, it is playing soccer. Both Mia's athletic ability, and her interest in the game was evident at a very early age. She joined her first soccer team at the age of five and has focused on the sport ever since. At the age of fifteen, Mia became the youngest player ever to join the U.S. Women's National Team. As the years passed, Mia's dedication to her sport continued to pay off. She won several awards, including three olympic medals, and was recognized as the U.S. Soccer Female Athlete of the Year for five years in a row. It is hard to believe that when Mia was a baby, she has had to spend several months with her feet in casts to correct a structural foot problem. Could you be the next Mia Hamm of art, music, or sports? Anything is possible if you work hard enough.
ReplyDeleteAll of us have a special skill or talent. That skill or talent may be drawing, playing a musical instrument, or excelling in a sport. For Mia Hamm, it is playing soccer. Both Mia's athletic ability and her interest in the game was evident at a very early age. She joined her first soccer team at the age of five, and has focused on the sport ever since. At the age of fifteen, Mia became the youngest player ever to join the U.S. Women's National Team. As the years passed, Mia's dedication to her sport continued to pay off. She won several awards including three Olympic medals, and was recognized as the U.S. Soccer Female Athlete of the Year for five years in a row. It is hard to believe that when Mia was a baby, she had to spend several months with her feet in casts to correct a structural foot problem. Could you be the next Mia Hamm of art, music, or sports? Anything is possible if you work hard enough.
ReplyDeleteAll of us have a special skill,or talent;That skill, or talent may be drawing, playing a misical instrument, or excelling in a sport.However Mia Hamm is excelling soccer,both Mia's athletic ability and her interest in hte soccer game was evident. At the very early age of five years old Mia joined her first soccer team, Mia has been focused on sports ever since she joined.When Mia got to the age of fifteen, Mia became the most youngest player of all to join the U.S Women's National Team. As Mia grew older, Mia's pation for sports continued to pay off. Mia won several more awards, such as three Olympic medals. Mia was recognized as the U.S Soccer Female Athlete of the year for fives years in a row. Surprisigly when mia was just a baby, she was walking in casts to correct a foot problem. Could yo be as well as mia was in art, music, or even sports?Anything is possible just never give up, try your best and you will succeed
ReplyDeleteAll of us have a special skill or talent. That skill or talent may be drawing, playing a musical instrument, or excelling in a sport. For Mia Hamm it is playing soccer. Both Mia's athletic ability and her interest in the game were evident at a very early age. She joined her first soccer team at the age of five and has focused on the sport ever since. At the age of fifteen, Mia became the youngest player ever to join the U.S. Women's National Team. As the years passed, Mia's dedication to her sport continued to pay off. She won several awards, including three Olympic medals, and was recognized as the U.S. Soccer Female Athlete of the Year for five years in a row. It is hard to believe that when Mia was a baby, she has had to spend several months with her feet in casts to correct a structural foot problem. Could you be the next Mia Hamm of art, music, or sports? Anything is possible if you work hard enough.
ReplyDeleteAll of us have a special skill or talent. That skill or talent may be drawing, playing a musical instrument, or excelling in a sport. For Mia Hamm it's playing soccer. Both Mia's athletic ability and her interest in the game was evident. At the age of five, she joined her first soccer team, and has focused on the sport ever since. At the age of fifteen, Mia became the most youngest player ever to join the U.S. Women's National Team. As the years passed, Mia's dedication to her sport continued to pay off. She won several awards, including three olympic medals, and was recognized as the U.S. Soccer Female Athlete of the Year for five years in a row. It is hard to believe that when Mia was a baby, she has had to spend several months with her feet in casts to correct a structural foot problem. Could you be the next Mia Hamm of art, music, or sports? Anything is possible if you work hard enough.
ReplyDeleteAll of us have a special skill or talent. That skill or talent may be drawing, playing a musical instrument, or excelling in a sport. For Mia Hamm, it is playing soccer. Both Mia's athletic ability and her interest in the game were evident at a very early age. She joined her first soccer team at the age of five, and has focused on the sport ever since. At the age of fifteen, Mia became the youngest player ever to join the U.S. Women's National Team. As the years passed, Mia's dedication to her sport continued to pay off. She won several awards, including three Olympic medals and was recognized as the U.S. Soccer Female Athlete of the Year for five years in a row. It is hard to believe that when Mia was a baby, she has had to spend several months with her feet in casts to correct a structural foot problem. Could you be the next Mia Hamm of art, music or sports? Anything is possible if you work hard enough.
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ReplyDeleteAll of us have a special skill or talent. That skill or talent may be drawing, playing a musical instrument, or excelling in a sport. For Mia Hamm, it is playing soccer. Both Mia's athletic ability and her interest in the game were evident at a very early age. She joined her first soccer team at the age of five and has focused on the sport ever since. At the age of fifteen, Mia became the youngest player ever to join the U.S. Women's National Team. As the years passed, Mia's dedication to her sport continued to pay off. She won several awards, including three Olympic medals, and was recognized as the U.S. Soccer Female Athlete of the Year for five years in a row. It is hard to believe that when Mia was a baby, she had to spend several months with her feet in casts to correct a structural foot problem. Could you be the next Mia Hamm of art, music, or sports? Anything is possible if you work hard enough.
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